Feedback on my completed first draft

This is feedback from one of my classmates. Here, Johnny is reviewing my completed first draft of my music video by pointing out things that I have done well and letting me know on areas where I can improve to ensure that my video is of the best quality.
I will take Johnny's advice to improve my video, especially any feedback on the camera work due to his experience in photography and working with SLR cameras. Not only is his feedback from the point of view of someone who would potentially watch this video as an audience member, but also from someone who is media literate and aware of the codes and conventions of a slow piano pop song.